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Once I saw a flower
On a white field
Freezing to death
With all the colors of July
And that is art.

Once I saw a man walk across a field
When everyone else
Walked on the sidewalks
All around
And that is art.

Once I saw a little girl
And it broke my heart
When she kissed her mother’s cheek
And that is art.
©2007-2009 ~bassforsoldier
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I'm takin a writing of poetry class.

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:iconpipoy:
Hmmmm. I like it. Except for this line...

"With all the colors of July"

But that's just my opinion.

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:iconbassforsoldier:
thanks. i'll keep that in mind. i must admit that i'm not too fond of that line myself.

--
"I'm like a pelican at riptide:
I'm a corpse, I'm not a fisherman."
*TheWritersMeow
:icontirrie:
i dont know how you can stand it! forced-creativity is agony! i nearly head-butted this 'famous' poet we had to work with because he was such a tosser!

i stuck my nametag on my mouth cus i was BORED and he said i was being very expressive and made everyone look at me ;-;
:iconbassforsoldier:
hehe

do you not like the poem?

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"I'm like a pelican at riptide:
I'm a corpse, I'm not a fisherman."
*TheWritersMeow
:iconbassforsoldier:
oh wait, i get it. no, i actually like the workshopping atmosphere. you have to read some bad stuff, but it gives you ideas of how to change your own stuff.

but then, we didn't really have to deal with any famous people. that would be a pain in the ass.

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"I'm like a pelican at riptide:
I'm a corpse, I'm not a fisherman."
*TheWritersMeow
:iconleahnari:
Nice sentiment. I like the images you used, and your structure.

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"Being so passionate about something is a talent in itself." -Alphonse Elric
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:iconbassforsoldier:
are you going through and reading all my stuff? if so, keep going. i'm enjoying the attention.

thanks

--
"I'm like a pelican at riptide:
I'm a corpse, I'm not a fisherman."
*TheWritersMeow

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